Question

書面表達(dá)(10分)

根據(jù)以下提示，寫一篇80字左右的短文。

Lisa是印度一個貧困家庭的孩子。

過去她們家很窮，她沒錢上學(xué)，只好整天在農(nóng)場干活，既不會讀也不會寫。

她多么希望她能上學(xué)！有一天，一位UNCIFE的工作人員來到她的村莊，了解了她的情況 后，給她提供了上學(xué)的錢。

Lisa現(xiàn)在在校讀書，現(xiàn)在既會讀也會寫了，長大后也想成為一位UNICEF的工作人員，幫助更多貧困的孩子。

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

Lisa is an Indian poor child. They were very poor in the past, and she had no money to go to school. So she had to work on the farm all day, she could neither read nor write. She wished she could go to school! One day , a staff of the UNCIFE came to her village. After learning about her condition, the staff gave her money and afforded her to go to school. Now Lisa studies at school, and she can read and write. She wants to be a staff of the UNCIFE when she grows up, and help more poor children.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，介紹Lisa在UNCIFE的工作人員的資助下會讀也會寫的故事。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般過去時和一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱為第一，三人稱，注意主謂一致問題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見句式的應(yīng)用，比如：Lisa is......；They were.....； she had to ......； the staff gave......；She wants to...... 等句式的應(yīng)用。寫作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文后要把提綱的內(nèi)容表達(dá)完整。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語言簡練。開頭介紹了Lisa的過去，接下來介紹在UNCIFE的工作人員的資助下，她能去上學(xué)，最后指出她希望長大后，幫助更多的貧窮孩子。此處用了 in the past，all day, learning about，afforded her to ，wants to 等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。