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3．最近媒體對"中國式過馬路"這一現(xiàn)象進行了尖銳的批評．請你以一個中學生的角色，寫一篇短文，對"中國式過馬路"這一現(xiàn)象加以評論．

現(xiàn)象	很多人過馬路時不看紅綠燈
原因	缺乏交通安全意識 匆忙趕時間
措施	遵守交通規(guī)則 你自己的建議…

注意：1．文中不能出現(xiàn)自己的姓名和學校名稱．
      2．開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．字數(shù)：80詞左右，不可逐字翻譯．
   3．參考詞語：紅綠燈traffic lights，缺乏安全意識 lack awarenessof traffic safety  遵守交通規(guī)則 obey the traffic rules 
Chinese Style of Crossing Streets 
Chinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the internet recently．
．Now many people cross streets without looking at the traffic lights．Why？I think there are two main reasons．Some people lack awareness of traffic safety．Besides，some people are so busy that they don't want to wait for the green light．
However，it has brought danger to themselves as well as to others．So I hope something must be done to avoid traffic accidents． For example，whoever breaks the traffic rules should be punished．
As middle school students，we should obey the traffic rules．What's more，I will try my best to advise people to obey the rules．Only in this way can we cross streets safely．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是對"中國式過馬路"這一現(xiàn)象加以評論．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第一人稱輔以第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．現(xiàn)象：很多人過馬路時不看紅綠燈
2．原因：（1）缺乏交通安全意識；（2）匆忙趕時間
3．措施：（1）遵守交通規(guī)則；（2）你自己的建議…
常用到的重點短語：
lack of 缺乏…
besides另外
so…that如此…以至于
wait for等待
break rules違反規(guī)則
what's more 再者
try one's best to  do sth竭盡全力做某事
advise sb to do sth建議某人做某事
高分句型：
1．①For example，②whoever breaks the traffic rules ③should be punished．
①for example，引出事例，常放句首，逗號隔開．
②whoever引導的主語從句，含義無論是誰．
③情態(tài)動詞的被動語態(tài)，主語whoever breaks the traffic rules是動詞punish的承受者，構(gòu)成被動關(guān)系，故用被動語態(tài)．
2．Only in this way can we cross streets safely．
這是一個倒裝句，only+狀語（副詞、介詞短語、從句等）"放在句首時，句子要用倒裝語序，這里是主謂倒裝．再例如：Only when he is selfless can a man be fearless．只有無私，才能無畏．

解答 Chinese Style of Crossing Streets 
Chinese style of crossing streets has beena hot topic on the internet recently．（點題，引出下文）
Now many people cross streets without looking at the traffic lights．（現(xiàn)象）Why？I think there are two main reasons．Some people lack awareness of traffic safety．（缺乏交通安全意識）Besides，some people are so busy that they don't want to wait for the green light．（匆忙趕時間）
  However，it has brought danger to themselves as well as to others．So I hope something must be done to avoid traffic accidents． For example，whoever breaks the traffic rules should be punished．（高分句型）
As middle school students，we should obey the traffic rules．（遵守交通規(guī)則）What's more，Iwill try my best to advise people to obey the rules．Only in this way can we cross streets safely．（自己的建議）．（高分句型）

點評 本題是一篇圖表作文，圖表作為書面表達的一種信息提示方式，比提綱作文線索顯得更簡潔明了，寫作時也容易區(qū)分表達，本題在寫作時，要特別注意幾種情況的描述，不能逐句翻譯，同時要根據(jù)提示有效靈活的構(gòu)思，恰當使用邏輯詞語，讓文章顯得有條理，不雜亂．