Question

9．中國自古以來就有尊師重教的優(yōu)良傳統(tǒng)，"程門立雪"就是一個(gè)典型例子．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示寫一篇短文，講述這個(gè)故事，并簡單談?wù)撃愕目捶ǎ?br />楊時(shí)去拜見老師程頤→老師在睡覺→楊時(shí)在雪地等→老師醒來，地上的雪已經(jīng)很厚了．
要求：1）詞數(shù)80左右；
2）短文須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，但不要逐句翻譯，可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)和適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使短文通順連貫．
參考詞匯：respect 尊敬
Long，long ago in China there was a young man called Yang Shi．One day he went to visit his teacher Chang Yi．It was snowing heavily．Cheng Yi was sleeping then，so Yang Shi waited in the snow outside．He kept waiting in the snow until his teacher woke up．Then they found that the ground was already covered with thick snow!
We should learn from Yang Shi and respect our teachers．A good education makes a country strong!．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容寫一個(gè)小故事"程門立雪"．時(shí)態(tài)為一般過去時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．其次考生可從兩方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：1．程門立雪的故事；2．我的感受
常用到的重點(diǎn)句型和短語：
Long，long ago很久很久以前
keep doing sth一直做某事
wake up醒來
learn from sb向誰學(xué)習(xí)
be covered with被覆蓋…

【高分句型】：
Long，long ago in China there was a young man called Yang Shi．
本句中的called YangShi過去分詞短語作為后置定語，修飾a young man．Long，long ago是時(shí)間狀語．以及there be表示有．
He kept waiting in the snow until his teacher woke up．
句中keep doing sth表示一致做某事以及until引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句．

解答 Long，long ago in China there was a young man called Yang Shi．（高分句型）One day he went to visit his teacher Chang Yi．（拜見老師）It was snowing heavily．Cheng Yi was sleeping then，（老師睡覺）so Yang Shi waited in the snow outside．（雪地里等）He kept waiting in the snow until his teacher woke up．（高分句型）Then they found that the ground was already covered with thick snow!（醒來，地上的厚雪）
We should learn from Yang Shi and respect our teachers．A good education makes a country strong!（我的感受）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會(huì)造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個(gè)提綱的要點(diǎn)．行文間要注意簡化描述，用簡短的語句代替冗長的語句．在作文完成的時(shí)候，應(yīng)該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達(dá)清楚的要點(diǎn)和細(xì)節(jié)．