Question

20．你一定有自己的未來計劃．請你以未來計劃為話題，根據(jù)以下提示寫一篇100詞左右的短文．
（1）你的夢想職業(yè)及居住地等；
（2）你做出這些選擇的理由；
（3）你為實(shí)現(xiàn)未來計劃應(yīng)做的努力；
（4）…
注意：文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)人名、校名等相關(guān)信息．
I want to be an English teacher，and I am going to work and live in the city of Beijing．
First，English is becoming more and more useful and important and being an English teacher is exciting，too．If I am an English teacher，I can help my students with their English study．Second．I like being with children because it makes me feel young．At last，Beijing is the capital of China．I can meet many English speakers and I can improve my English by communicating with them．
To make my dream come true，I will study English hard every day and speak English as often as possible．I will do more listening in the morning．I'm sure I'll love my job and my students and be a friend of them．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是說說未來的計劃．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時輔以一般將來時．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
（1）你的夢想職業(yè)及居住地等；
（2）你做出這些選擇的理由；
（3）你為實(shí)現(xiàn)未來計劃應(yīng)做的努力；
（4）其他
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
want to be 想要成為…
比較級+and+比較級  越來越…
help sb with sth幫助某人做某事
make sb do sth讓某人做某事
by doing sth通過做某事
come true實(shí)現(xiàn)
as…as possible盡可能怎么樣
高分句型：
1．English is becoming①more and more useful and important and②being an English teacher is exciting，too．
①比較級+and+比較級  越來越…這里的兩個形容詞 useful and important 是多音節(jié)詞，故more+and+more+adj．
②動名詞短語being an English teacher做主語，謂語動詞用單數(shù)．
2．①To make my dream come true，I will study English hard every day and speak English ②as often as possible
①動詞不定式作為目的狀語，也可以用in order to make my dream come true．
②as…as possible盡可能怎么樣，中間加形容詞/副詞或名詞．
加形容詞/副詞：as often as possible盡可能地多的
加名詞：We need as many apples as possible．我們需要盡可能多的蘋果；

解答 I want to be an English teacher，and I am going to work and live in the city of Beijing．（夢想職業(yè)及居住地）
First，English is becoming more and more useful and important and being an English teacher is exciting，too（高分句型）．If I am an English teacher，I can help my students with their English study．Second．I like being with children because it makes me feel young．At last，Beijing is the capital of China．I can meet many English speakers and I can improve my English by communicating with them．（理由）
To make my dream come true，I will study English hard every day and speak English as often as possible（高分句型）．I will do more listening in the morning．（你為實(shí)現(xiàn)未來計劃應(yīng)做的努力）I'm sure I'll love my job and my students and be a friend of them．（我的信心）

點(diǎn)評 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個提綱的要點(diǎn)．行文間要注意簡化描述，用簡短的語句代替冗長的語句．在作文完成的時候，應(yīng)該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達(dá)清楚的要點(diǎn)和細(xì)節(jié)．