Question

4．假定你的好友名叫Bill，十一名美國(guó)中學(xué)生，他打算今年暑假來(lái)寧夏旅游．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以上內(nèi)容和所給提示用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇介紹他的短文．短文首句已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
提示：
1 家庭情況、性格及愛(ài)好；
2 老師及同學(xué)對(duì)他的評(píng)價(jià)；
3 來(lái)寧夏旅游的原因．
要求：
1 詞數(shù)80左右；
2 合理增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Bill is my good friend．He is an American middle school student．He will come to travel in Ningxia this summer vacation．He is the only child in his family．His father is a doctor，and his mother is a teacher．He is friendly and is ready to help others．His teachers and classmates think he is clever and hard-working．He often spends his spare time traveling around the world．He says that Ningxia has many famous places of interest．That's the reason why he will come to Ningxia this summer．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇命題作文，主要是讓同學(xué)們寫(xiě)一篇短文來(lái)介紹一下美國(guó)好友Bill，他今年暑假將要來(lái)寧夏旅游，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)包括：1、家庭情況、性格及愛(ài)好；2、老師及同學(xué)對(duì)他的評(píng)價(jià)；3、為什么來(lái)寧夏旅游．由于介紹的是Bill，所以人稱(chēng)要使用第三人稱(chēng)，由于介紹的是他現(xiàn)在的狀況和將要來(lái)旅行，所以時(shí)態(tài)要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)，要根據(jù)不同的內(nèi)容去選擇合適的時(shí)態(tài)．
重要的短語(yǔ)和句型：
come to來(lái)到
the only唯一的
be ready to help others準(zhǔn)備幫助他人
clever and hard-working聰明又努力
spend…（in） doing sth．花費(fèi)時(shí)間或金錢(qián)做某事
travel around the world周游世界
places of interest名勝古跡
the reason why…的原因
高分句型：
His teachers and classmates think he is clever and hard-working．他的老師和同學(xué)認(rèn)為他很聰明，學(xué)習(xí)也很努力．
and連接兩個(gè)不同的名詞作主語(yǔ)，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞要用復(fù)數(shù)，本句含有一個(gè)省略that的賓語(yǔ)從句
That's the reason why he will come to Ningxia this summer．那就是他什么來(lái)寧夏列旅游的原因．
why也可以引導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句，這時(shí)先行詞往往是reason

解答 參考答案：
    Bill is my good friend．He is an American middle school student（介紹Bill的身份）．He will come to travel in Ningxia this summer vacation．He is the only child in his family．His father is a doctor，and his mother is a teacher（介紹家人）．He is friendly and is ready to help others．【高分句型一】His teachers and classmates think he is clever and hard-working（老師及同學(xué)對(duì)他的評(píng)價(jià)）．He often spends his spare time traveling around the world．He says that Ningxia has many famous places of interest（說(shuō)明來(lái)寧夏旅游的原因）．【高分句型二】That's the reason why he will come to Ningxia this summer．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 寫(xiě)命題作文時(shí)，首先要仔細(xì)審題，確定要使用的人稱(chēng)和時(shí)態(tài)，還要注意羅列內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)不能有漏落，行文要流暢，可以適當(dāng)?shù)脑鎏砑?xì)節(jié)，在表達(dá)的時(shí)候，要使用地道的英語(yǔ)，可以使用把握比較高的結(jié)構(gòu)，短語(yǔ)等等，比如賓語(yǔ)從句、定語(yǔ)從句等等，這樣可以提高文章的檔次，獲得更多的得分點(diǎn)．