Question

假如你是Daniel，剛剛買(mǎi)了一張名叫“新中國(guó)60年”的教育光盤(pán)，根據(jù)下面所給信息，把它推薦給你的同學(xué)。要求包含所有要點(diǎn)，句子通順，適當(dāng)使用連接詞，不少于80詞。文章開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Profile Name of game: New China’s 60 Years Number of levels: 6 Main character: Mr Chen Age: 70 years old Goal: Travel around China to know the great changes of China over the past 60 years. Love the country, love the hometown and make new China stronger and richer Area of study: Chinese history Setting: Different places around China Designer: Cao Jun Producer: Sunshine Educational CD-ROMs Co. Sold in: Xinhua Bookstores

  Hello, everyone! I would like to recommend you a new educational CD-ROM.______________________________________________________________________
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Answer 1

Hello, everyone! I would like to recommend you a new educational CD-ROM. Its name is “New China’s 60 Years”. It has six levels.The main character of the game is Mr Chen. He is seventy years old. The goal of the game is to travel around China to know the great changes of China over the past 60 years and let the young people love their country,love their hometown and use their skills and wisdom to make new China stronger and richer. The game is set in different places around China. It is designed by Cao Jun and produced by Sunshine Educational CD-ROM Co. You can buy the CDs in Xinhua Bookstore.

試題分析: 這是一篇給材料作文，要求寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于一張教育光盤(pán)的說(shuō)明文。本文材料是一篇說(shuō)明書(shū)，在動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀這些內(nèi)容，爭(zhēng)取把主要內(nèi)容都表達(dá)出來(lái)。結(jié)合材料可知本文主要是第一人稱(chēng)，一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，注意時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)與時(shí)態(tài)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)及大小寫(xiě)等問(wèn)題，不要犯語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤。注意上下文之間的邏輯關(guān)系，語(yǔ)意連貫。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：注意寫(xiě)作中的時(shí)態(tài)、人稱(chēng)和數(shù)的問(wèn)題，時(shí)態(tài)一般是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱(chēng)是第一人稱(chēng)較多。寫(xiě)作中語(yǔ)言要準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)明，說(shuō)明有條理，符合邏輯。