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19．如今，在我們身邊，父母均在外打工的留守兒童比比皆是．關注留守兒童（left-behind children），構建和諧社會的重要內容．關注留守兒童，要靠全社會的共同努力．你認為留守童面臨的主要問題有那些？為了解決留守兒童的問題，請你向當?shù)卣�府提建議：提示：1）缺乏父母的關愛（be short of love），性格孤僻（lonely），學習壓力大、自卑．2）缺乏安全保障，缺乏 家庭關愛（families'care），容易犯錯誤甚至犯罪（do some thing against the laws）．
建議：1）學校建立留守兒童 心里咨詢室（Psychological Counseling Room），老師應該把愛播撒到每一個留守兒童的心田．2）政府利用節(jié)假日建立 留守兒童家長學校（ parents'school for these children）． 3）社會各界開展與留守兒童 一幫一結對子的活動（hand-in-hand activity）．4）父母盡可能回到孩子身邊，給孩子生活上和學習上的幫助和關愛．
表達要求：語言流暢、書寫規(guī)范、卷面整潔、字數(shù)不少于80個．
Dear Mayor：
I'm a middle school student．I'm writing to tell you something around us．Nowadays，there are many-left-behind children whose parents work away from their hometowns．Most of them are from the countryside，you know，they have many problem．They are always lonely and stressed out because they are short of their parents'love．At the same time，they are easy to make mistakes even do some thing against the laws，because they're short of their families'care．
How to solve their problems？In my opinion，school should set up PsychologicalCounselingRoom andthe teacher should put love into every left-behind children's heart． The government can set up a parents school for these children on holidays，you can organize"hand-in-hand"activity to call on more people to help them．You can also raise money to donate to these children．As the song says："If everyone gives their love，the world will be better．"It's very important for us to pay more attention to these children if we want to build a harmonious society． Above all，the parentsare supposed togo back to be with their children to give help and care to them as possible as they can．Best wishes to you!．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內容是談談留守童面臨的主要問題并向當?shù)卣�府提建議．注意信件的格式．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
一、主要問題1．缺乏父母的關愛，性格孤僻，學習壓力大、自卑． 
               2．缺乏安全保障（缺乏家庭關愛，容易犯錯誤甚至犯罪）． 
二、建議：1．學校建立留守兒童心理咨詢室，老師應該把愛播撒到每一個留守兒童的心田． 
                2．政府利用節(jié)假日建立留守兒童家長學校． 
                3．社會各界開展與留守兒童一幫一的結對活動．
                4．父母盡可能回到孩子身邊，給孩子生活上和學習上的幫助和關愛．
常用到的重點短語：
stress out 壓力大
be short of 缺乏
make mistakes 犯錯誤
set up 建立
pay attention to 關注
above all最重要的
as possible as sb can盡可能地
【高分句型】
1．Nowadays，①there are many-left-behind children ②whose parents work③away from their hometowns．
①there be句型，表示存在
②whose是關系詞，作為定語從句的定語，修飾先行詞children．
③away from 遠離
2．①It's very important for us to②pay more attention to these children ③if we want to build a harmonious society．
①it is+adj+for sb+to do sth對某人來說做某事是怎么樣的，it是形式主語，動詞不定式做真正主語．
②pay attention to 關注
③if 引導的條件狀語從句．

解答 Dear Mayor，
I'm a middle school student．I'm writing to tell you something around us． Nowadays，there are many-left-behind children whose parents work away from their hometowns．【高分句型】Most of them are from the countryside，you know，they have many problem．They are always lonely and stressed out because they are short of their parents'love．（缺乏父母的關愛，性格孤僻，學習壓力大、自卑）At the same time，they are easy to make mistakes even do some thing against the laws，because they're short of their families'care．（缺乏安全保障）
How to solve their problems？In my opinion，schools should set up Psychological Counseling Room and the teachers  should put love into every left-behind children's heart．  （學校建立留守兒童心理咨詢室，老師應該把愛播撒到每一個留守兒童的心田．）The government can set up a parents school for these children on holidays，you can organize"hand-in-hand"activity to call on more people to help them．You can also raise money to donate to these children．As the song says："If everyone gives their love，the world will be better．"It's very important for us to pay more attention to these children if we want to build a harmonious society．（政府利用節(jié)假日建立留守兒童家長學校，社會各界開展與留守兒童一幫一的結對活動）【高分句型】Above all，the parents are supposed to go back to be with their children to give help and care to them as possible as they can．（父母盡可能回到孩子身邊，給孩子生活上和學習上的幫助和關愛）
Best wishes to you!

點評 這是一篇給材料作文，本文已經給出了主要寫作要點，動筆前要先認真閱讀要點，然后圍繞要點適當發(fā)揮．寫作中，應注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內容利用上．語言的表述應該符合語法的結構，造句應該符合英語的表達習慣．適當使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關系．