Question

【題目】寫作

今年春節(jié)晚會上，很多人加入了搶紅包游戲活動，但也有人表示擔(dān)憂。假如你叫李華，你班最近開展了一個有關(guān)搶紅包游戲活動的調(diào)查。請你用英文給學(xué)校校刊《英語園地》寫一封信，介紹此次調(diào)查的結(jié)果并談?wù)勀愕挠^點。

參考詞匯：搶紅包grabbing red packets

要 求：1）表達(dá)清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；

2）必須包括表格中所有的相關(guān)信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；

3）詞數(shù)：100詞左右（短文的開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)）；

4）不得使用真實姓名、校名和地名等。

Dear Editor，

I am writing to tell you about the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” in our class.

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Yours sincerely，

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Editor，

I am writing to tell you about the survey on the activity of “Grabbing red packets” in our class. About 70% of the students took part in the game in my class. About 75% of them think it is a popular form of entertainment and can bring them more fun. It can bring people closer so that they can make more friends. Grapping red packets had been part of people’s lives. However， about 25% of them are worried about the activity. They say some people spend too much time grapping red packets. As a result， they don’t have enough communication with their family members. As a result， they may feel a little lonely. Moreover， looking at the screen for too long is harmful to people’s eyes. Grapping red packets on the street might cause traffic accidents.

I think this game is really exciting， but we should spend more time communicating with our family members.

Yours sincerely，

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本文根據(jù)所給信息可知，會使用到一般現(xiàn)在時。然后靈活采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡潔。最后必須認(rèn)真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點誤用等。

寫作亮點：本文內(nèi)容符合題意，敘事條理清晰，描述自然流暢，發(fā)揮恰當(dāng)，切合要求。文中使用了不少固定詞組如：took part in be worried about， spend...doing...， feel lonely， be harmful to 等； 還使用了豐富的句型，如so that引導(dǎo)的目的狀語從句，賓語從句等；同時使用了恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，如however，as a result等使文意更加連貫；為短文增色不少。