Question

4月20日，我國(guó)四川雅安發(fā)生特大地震，給人們的生命和財(cái)產(chǎn)安全帶來(lái)重大損失。災(zāi)后人們紛紛伸出了援助之手。請(qǐng)你以校委會(huì)的名義用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一份80字左右的倡議書(shū)，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
要點(diǎn)提示：(1)地震帶來(lái)重大損失：①摧毀了(destroy)村莊；②人們失去了良田和家園；③數(shù)百人失去生命；
(2)人們紛紛獻(xiàn)出愛(ài)心，急忙給災(zāi)區(qū)人民提供了食物和衣服；
(3)作為中學(xué)生我們應(yīng)該做什么……
Dear schoolmates,
On April 20, An earthquake hit Yaan Sichuan. It brought a great loss to the people there.
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If everyone gives a hand , our world will become much more beautiful .
School committee

Answer 1

Dear schoolmates,
On April 20, An earthquake hit Yaan Sichuan. It brought a great loss to the people there.
The earthquake brought a great loss. It destroyed the villages and towns, so people lost their farmlands and homes. hundreds of people even lost their homes. They had nowhere to live and no food to eat. When people heard the news, they showed their love in different ways. They were in a great hurry to provide food and clothes to the people in disaster areas. Some even gave money to them. As students, I think we should try our best to help the people in need. Let’s save our pocket money and send it to them.
If everyone gives a hand , our world will become much more beautiful .
School committee

解析試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，所給材料比較詳細(xì)，寫(xiě)作中注意將雅安發(fā)生地震的事實(shí)及這次活動(dòng)目的介紹清楚，并發(fā)出捐款的倡議。在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意時(shí)態(tài)，人稱和固定詞組的搭配，要注意語(yǔ)言的規(guī)范性。結(jié)合材料可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在及過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)，注意時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)是時(shí)態(tài)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，序數(shù)詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，、條理清楚，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
考點(diǎn)：應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作
點(diǎn)評(píng)：做英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)時(shí)，要注意認(rèn)真審題，分析體裁，確定時(shí)態(tài)；分析內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，列出一些基本詞匯及詞組；注意表達(dá)的條理性，用好連接詞。最后，注意不要犯語(yǔ)法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤。日常學(xué)習(xí)中，注意多背誦范文，熟記一些經(jīng)典句型，考試時(shí)就能有所參照，有的放矢。