Question

13．In 60to 120words，write about the topic"The best gift I've received"．（以"我收到的最好
的禮物"為題，寫一篇60-120個詞的短文，標點符號不占格）
The following are for reference only．（以下問題僅供參考）
√What is the gift？Who was it from？
√What is the gift like？
√Why do you like it so much？
√What makes it so special？
（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分．）
Everyone has ever received some gifts so far．Maybe they were from your parents friends or classmates．I have received a really great gift from my father when I was a child．It's a ticket to a concert．And I listened to the concert with my father．I enjoyed the piano voice and became more and more excited．At that time I knew that I had fallen in love with the piano music．I really like that concert．
The magical music has encouraged me for a long time．However I have never gone to a concert again．But I still remember the first concert in my life．
Though several years have gone，I can feel the wonderful piano voice．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是"The best gift I've received"為題談談你收到的最好的禮物．時態(tài)主要為一般過去時和一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．最好的禮物是誰送的什么禮物．
2．禮物是什么樣的
3．為什么你如此喜歡 
4．禮物的特別之處

常用到的重點短語：
so far 至今
比較級+and+比較級  越來越…
fall in love with 愛上…

【高分句型】
1．I have received a really great gift from my father when I was a child．
when引導的時間狀語從句．
2．At that time I knew ①that I had②fallen in love with the piano music．
①that引導的賓語從句，作為know的賓語．
②fall in love with 愛上…
3．Though several years have gone，I can feel the wonderful piano voice．
though"雖然"引導的讓步狀語從句，不能和but連用．

解答 The best gift I've received
Everyone has ever received some gifts so far．Maybe they were from your parents friends or classmates．I have received a really great gift from my father when I was a child．【高分句型】（最好的禮物是誰送的什么禮物）It's a ticket to a concert．（禮物是什么樣的）And I listened to the concert with my father．I enjoyed the piano voice and became more and more excited．（為什么你如此喜歡 ）At that time I knew that I had fallen in love with the piano music．【高分句型】I really like that concert．
The magical music has encouraged me for a long time．However I have never gone to a concert again．But I still remember the first concert in my life．
Though several years have gone，I can feel the wonderful piano voice【高分句型】（禮物的特別之處）

點評 這是一篇給材料作文．動筆前要認真閱讀材料，不要遺漏要點，并適當發(fā)揮．要注意主謂一致等問題．寫作中要適當使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．學習中注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當引用，使文章的表達更有邏輯性，更富有條理．